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In the mood for mood. by ~exhalesigh:iconexhalesigh:



We vacationed with gravitas:
burning fires, passion near the
ice box machine, Mexican beaches,
and one long glorious night in
a cabin tucked in the woods
where our sighing chorus started
the coyotes

singing. But the best was when we got home,
our luggage
cuddled in the vestibule,
or the hallway, but it was a vestibule
to us
because it was OUR hallway,
where we threw off our vestments,
which were really
just our clothes
but they seemed like garments,
like raiment,
like habits sorely religious,
which is how we felt dropping them

one by one on the stairs:
white shirts, black bra, blue jeans,
red socks,
star-spangled underwear;
then we stood naked in our own bedroom, our bed
with its dark comfort(er),
our pillows that smelled like us, and
the cat watching us
from the windowseat, purring
just when he should,
complementing the street noise
and our music.
©2005-2009 ~exhalesigh
:iconexhalesigh:

Author's Comments

Light those smelly candles
as your homesickness
subsides
until you're sick of being
home.

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:icongeek-stink-breath:
wow. once again. good job. you're really good at writing.
:heart: yanira.
:icondrying-out:
nice!!

--
this is your life and its ending one at the time
:iconfrostypeanut:
This is a great story! I love how you captured that feeling of...knowingness. I don't know how to describe it, but it's when you and only you understand the mysteries and the differences of things that others do not. I particularly enjoyed "cuddled in the vestibulule
or the hallway, but it was a vestibule
to us
because it was OUR hallway".
Wonderful! Great job!

--
I know what a prince and lover ought to be.
:iconsilverrainbows:
beautifully told :) i love it.
:iconkatarthis:
Wow! Such a shame that literature gets so little attention. You created a masterpiece with this one.

Congratulations on the UA February feature pick. Definately deserving.

k

--
Be yourself. Just be. That is all you need to do to impress me.

Bless,
k
:iconkgemeni:
I like this one. Expert use of enjambment. The story it tells is also very resonant - it has an emotion I can identify with, of gladness to be home.
:icongoodbyemountain:
your enjambment is exemplary. and
this makes me feel like love is not just a word.

--
the world is sickSICK (so kiss me quick)
:iconredpapermoon:
what a moment to hold on to... this is the warmest writing I've read in quite some time.
:iconrichten:
what can I say that has not been by the previous posters... good work :D

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